Without Dante at the center of events, it feels like a anime-esque side story to me. Dante better have extremely good reasons for selling his job, maybe like finding out that his father was alive all this time.
Richard looks like an okay character design-wise; but I think you really have to come up with a solid backstory. Like, what made him move to Dante's city, how did he learn to fight, how and why did he buy the shop etc. With Nero, although very vague, we have enough answers for him to justify his existence in the story. Richard feels more like a blank slate, or maybe a typical shounen mc just happened to get into DMC universe.
Sorry if I sound mean with the criticism. You have a very solid foundation to build an interesting story on and Richard's artworks look cool as heck. I wish I could draw my fanfic characters that well. But the story needs to be refined and improved. At this point it's just a concept idea and nothing more. And sure, you can avoid all questions about Dante and the other characters; but if you solely focus on Richard and no one else, it'll be just a half-baked scenario done for the heck of it. Like MvC:I's campaign for example.
That's my two cents on the issue. Like I said, the foundation is solid, build it up! If you want ideas for specific questions, I believe everyone here are more than ready to help
Initially I did not give much information but now it seems obligatory.
I will explain it with a dialogue.
This dialogue will be Richard telling his story.
I've always had these skills ... since I was a kid.
They are useful but...
Ever since I was a little kid, the other kids were kidding me saying that I was just a demon ... a monster ...
I did not understand why they treated me that way ... I've always been extremely fast and I can do acrobatics without any difficulty, I never thought they were a demonlike skill.
This thing was making me crazy ....
One day I found my dead parents ... beside their bodies there was a figure ... high ... dark ... monstrous ... He looked at my father's corpse and said, "You did not respect the covenant Krugar "and then disappeared without leaving traces.
I do not care about that covenant ... but from that day I never stopped looking for revenge, so I decided to become a devil hunter. I trained myself, you created my moves, my style, my weapons ...
Now I'm 18, I left my foster parents and I decided to open an agency to get rid of demons, I just moved to a new city to buy a property where to live and open my agency.
