DmC Devil May Cry -Stairway to Heaven-

[Chancey289]

Angel: You came to the wrong neighborhood motherf#cker. DEMON!

 

[Rebel Dynasty]

I'd also like to urge anyone who's liked what I've written so far to check out the full free preview I have of another action short that goes along with another story I have in the works.

/shamelessplug

I read the action short, and it was quite good. You have a knack for setting the scene; it didn't take long for me to get a feel for Liana's character.

 

[TWOxACROSS]

I read the action short, and it was quite good. You have a knack for setting the scene; it didn't take long for me to get a feel for Liana's character.

:happy: Thank you for the kind words. I appreciate it!

Any criticism you might be able to give? I'm always trying to improve, of course

 

[Rebel Dynasty]

:happy: Thank you for the kind words. I appreciate it!

Any criticism you might be able to give? I'm always trying to improve, of course

Hmm...

Honestly, it was quite good. If there was one thing that needed a bit of tweaking, I'd say maybe some of the dialogue? But for the most part, I could find no fault with it. I think it was just the rookie's dialogue early on felt a bit awkward, but then I figured, "Maybe that's the intention, because the situation itself is awkward?"

^^; Tell you what; I'll get back to you on that in a short while, and let you know if there's something in particular I noticed.

Being a writer myself, and feeling I have a long way to go before reaching my goal, I always feel kind of weird, giving concrit...but, I'll do what I can (and don't worry, I'll be gentle).

 

[Rebel Dynasty]

Well, I've read over it again, and I stand by what I said before; in my humble opinion, it is really well written. I enjoyed the action, the descriptions, the details in their movements and attacks, and the snappy bits of dialogue between both Liana and Mar'la. I felt they both made compelling arguments, but that Mar'la, naturally, takes things too far in her way of thinking.

I like that your characters aren't the least bit slap-dash, and that they have that three-dimensional quality that makes a character relatable.

 

[TWOxACROSS]

Thank you so much. I honestly feel a bit humbled. I think I always struggle between the desire to improve and feeling that I'm not quite as good as I'm led to believe I am. I tend to second-guess myself a lot when it comes to my own work, and they do say we're our own harshest critics.

I'm glad you enjoyed In the Case of Dust, as it is one of my favorites (but aren't they all ). I would appreciate any sharing you might be able to do for the story and some of my other content, as I'm always looking for more exposure, which in turn can breed more critique and help me improve n.n

Thanks again

 

[Rebel Dynasty]

Thank you so much. I honestly feel a bit humbled. I think I always struggle between the desire to improve and feeling that I'm not quite as good as I'm led to believe I am. I tend to second-guess myself a lot when it comes to my own work, and they do say we're our own harshest critics.

I'm glad you enjoyed In the Case of Dust, as it is one of my favorites (but aren't they all ). I would appreciate any sharing you might be able to do for the story and some of my other content, as I'm always looking for more exposure, which in turn can breed more critique and help me improve n.n

Thanks again

I know the feeling all too well; it can be pretty overwhelming at times, even paralyzing, when you're torn between improving yourself, and fearing it will never be enough.

But, never give up; you have the talent, and I honestly think you have the potential to go somewhere with it.

It's true-well, in a lot of cases; most of us really are our own worst critics. Occasionally though, you come across a writer who thinks they're just it, but those types are pretty easy to sniff out. You're definitely not one of 'em.

Of course, it would be my pleasure. ^_^ Anything to help an aspiring fellow writer!

 

[Dante the demon killer]

sounds like a good story dude

 

[TWOxACROSS]

sounds like a good story dude

Thanks!

Speaking of - once this next chapter of Blast Back is up, I'll be working on the next mission!

 

[TWOxACROSS]

Okay, so, Blast Back is off to my editor, so while I'm waiting for her to have time to edit, I've begun the next mission. As a show of good faith, here's a tidbit from the rough draft...

Dante holstered his pistols and held his hands out in plea to the man in front of him. “I think we got off on the wrong foot…I’m Dante. Who may I ask is trying to kill me?” Dante said.
“The name of your executioner is Daniel, Ophanim of the First Sphere. Know this name demon, and tremble,” the man Daniel responded succinctly.
Dante held out his hands, wiggling his fingers with feigned fear. “Oooo~ Quite the spiel you got there, Daniel. Did you practice that in front of the mirror in your underwear?”

 

[Rebel Dynasty]

That last bit made me chuckle; I'd say he's very in-character.

 

[TWOxACROSS]

So now that Blast Back chapter III is out, I'm on to the next mission of this here thinger.

We've got ourselves a fight scene on our hands, so choreography is the name of the game for now. It's slow goin' but it is definitely goin'. Hope you enjoy what's to come n.n

 

[Rebel Dynasty]

You know you're a good writer when...

....you can make someone who doesn't even like DmC read your fanfic, and they legitimately enjoy it.


Curse you, Two... XD

Lol, all kidding aside; it's excellently written, you have an impressive writing flow, and your attention to detail of both the characters actions, thoughts, emotions, and of their surroundings is superb.

In short, I'm hooked...now update, dammit! D: For sanity's sake...don't leave us hanging like this, you sadistic bast*rd! :'( I beg of you....

 

[TWOxACROSS]

Heheh, welcome to the dark side, RebDy :3

In other news, all I can say about the current chapter so far is 鎖鎌

And also, I hope people aren't sensitive to pews getting cut in half, because that happens...a lot. Three times by my count so far

 

[Rebel Dynasty]

Lol, smart-ass. :tongue:

Okay, I just Google-translated that, and what I got out of it was Kusarigama for Japanese, or lock sickle for Chinese (effing Google, lol!), which if I'm not mistaken, is essentially the same thing; a chain-blade/scythe (which I only know because of Soul Eater-Tsubaki, whom is Black Star's weapon partner, turns into one).

So...there's a chain-blade coming up in the next chapter?

I can't speak for others, but damage in a church is bound to happen, since...well, what happened in the last chapter. ^^; If a battle's going to happen, collateral damage soon follows-it's inevitable.

Anyway, I'm looking forward to what happens next, and of course, once you get back to Blast Back, I'll be super stoked for that, too.

 

[TWOxACROSS]

You are correct, madam! The Saṃsāra was "gifted" to Dante by our dear friend Minos, no less.

It's actually sorta fun writing for a weapon like this. It's more than just a sword where you say how it's being swung or thrust, or even a gun and how its shot. This thing is a chain, a weighted end, and a sickle. Writing how he extends one part, pulls back to give slack to another end, and all that, certainly very fun.

 

[Rebel Dynasty]

I believe it. ^^ I would assume there's more of a challenge in order to ensure it follows the actual physics involved in wielding such a weapon, yes? It also probably offered a lot of breathing space on getting creative with it, as well.

I'm looking forward to seeing how you utilized it.

 

[TWOxACROSS]

And out of nowhere there will be a rapid-fire, surrounded-on-all-sides moment to the fight. It just sorta ended up that way, haha. Weeee~

 

[EllDawn]

And out of nowhere there will be a rapid-fire, surrounded-on-all-sides moment to the fight. It just sorta ended up that way, haha. Weeee~

Sort of ended up that way? I'm going to be amazed if there's a church left standing with how this is sounding.

 

[Rebel Dynasty]

Sort of ended up that way? I'm going to be amazed if there's a church left standing with how this is sounding.

Lol, my thoughts exactly.

I hope they have a Plan B for getting to...well, you know where.