LordOfDarkness
The Dark Avenger © †
I'm enjoying the story so far ^_^
My areas of criticism are grammatical errors however. This is only helpful criticism, so don't think I'm being rude or anything (Because I really do enjoy this work)
In the line 'The demon hunter strapped the sword back into it's rightful place on his back.', you have to remove the apostrophe from it's. It's means 'it is', and its means 'it belongs to someone or something'.
Examples:
And we both know that makes no sense. It's a very common mistake however, I was making this ages ago when I started out writing. It's the same with 'to' and 'too'. Many believe they are the same, however they are not. You use 'to' in something like "I went to the shops". And you use 'too' in something like "I love you too". The difference is that 'too' can be used to explain an amount of something, and also to express shared feelings. "I had too much on my hands" is an example of how it's used to explain an amount. Too much or too little. But you already know this
Also just to note, you can put 'where' and 'ever' together. It makes a less appealing looking word, 'wherever', which means basically 'where ever'. I believe I was aware of this, but it skipped my mind, so I went to check and you can use that. It just seems to flow a lot quicker than reading two words that you essentially want as one. And when you can have it as one, why not? Just to make it flow better ^_^
Anyway, quickly brushing aside my grammar class lol I think you did really well with this new chapter, and I look forward to reading more
My areas of criticism are grammatical errors however. This is only helpful criticism, so don't think I'm being rude or anything (Because I really do enjoy this work)
In the line 'The demon hunter strapped the sword back into it's rightful place on his back.', you have to remove the apostrophe from it's. It's means 'it is', and its means 'it belongs to someone or something'.
Examples:
- "It's only half past two" - "It is only half past two"
"I stabbed it in its back" - It reads how it should. The incorrect way would be "I stabbed it in it's back" which would mean "I stabbed it in it is back"
And we both know that makes no sense. It's a very common mistake however, I was making this ages ago when I started out writing. It's the same with 'to' and 'too'. Many believe they are the same, however they are not. You use 'to' in something like "I went to the shops". And you use 'too' in something like "I love you too". The difference is that 'too' can be used to explain an amount of something, and also to express shared feelings. "I had too much on my hands" is an example of how it's used to explain an amount. Too much or too little. But you already know this
Also just to note, you can put 'where' and 'ever' together. It makes a less appealing looking word, 'wherever', which means basically 'where ever'. I believe I was aware of this, but it skipped my mind, so I went to check and you can use that. It just seems to flow a lot quicker than reading two words that you essentially want as one. And when you can have it as one, why not? Just to make it flow better ^_^
Anyway, quickly brushing aside my grammar class lol I think you did really well with this new chapter, and I look forward to reading more
