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hey, i think that you are a great writer and that you should continue writing this story . it's really good and i say that truthfully cause i couldn't stop reading it and i just wanted to find out what would happen next, in each chapter i read. i think you have a real talent like seriously i would would kill to write as good as you because honestly i fail horribly at writing anything. the only thing about writing im good at is my penmanship. LOL
so i hope that you finish what you started because i think that not only your readers will appreciate it but you'll feel really accomplished, i know i would . so i hope you continue to keep writing
Is it just me or did all the fanfic readers come together in a secret meeting and decided that this will be their 2-step-method of attack? Step 1: FEED THE AUTHOR EGO. Step 2: PUT AUTHOR ON GUILT-TRIP.
It's a nice review, regardless, but I've gotten quite a few that are in the same lines as this one.
In the big crash, the engine would not have come through the windshield unless someone/thing that was incredibly strong lifted it out from under the hood and threw it through the front window. If you don't want Julian flinging engines about, then replace the engine with something off the truck coming through the windshield. It doesn't necessarily have to be anything large, just moving quickly and at the right height/angle.
I'm really enjoying the story.
Dear reviewer,
Yes, and that something incredibly strong is called impact. If you're doing more than the speed limit on a downhill and suddenly crash into a truck, it's fairly possible that the engine would have been sent flying. Stating that the engine would not have come through the windshield is akin to stating that a car could not end up looking like a squished stress-ball after a crash. Or like stating that if you crash into a truck, there's no possible way that you could be decapitated. I've seen some pretty nasty crashes in my lifetime, and since I've been an indirect victim of a fatal car crash, why would you think I would write lightheartedly about a car crash?
Also, it's not Julian that's throwing engines around. Julian was in the form of the mist. He didn't touch the car. The impact itself threw the engine out.
I'd also rather not have something come off the truck to crash through the windshield. This is a horror. I'd rather replace it with Dee's head bouncing through the glass than something coming off the truck.
Yes, thank you, I realise that it doesn't have to be something large to cause damage, but writing that something smaller, faster, and at the right height/angle smacks too much of Final Destination to my liking.
I'm happy with the scene as it is. I'm sorry you found fault in it.
Signed,
author.
That review also reminds me of the time Dante was arguing with me about erosion. Which I can't seem to find right now because I wanted to quote it, but yeah, he was basically telling me that Vergil's fingerprints can't logically still be imprinted in the ground around his grave after 20 years because of erosion and nonsense like that. It's like, SO WHAT? It's friggin FANFICTION. The point is, Vergil had to crawl his way out of the grave. Point made. The point is, the crash was hectic enough to throw the engine INTO the car. Point made. Why sweat the nitty-gritty details when I'm writing about a shadow man walking around in broad daylight? That's like Spongebob burning the party invitation in a fire because the writing was all distorted because somebody doesn't understand the physical limitations of underwater
